Just that extra

As you turn the key you wait for something. Anything. The ballerina is lopsided so you don’t hold out much hope. You’ve only wound it a little, knowing how old it is, you don’t want to overdo it – that’s you all over. Unstated. Underrated, according to Fred.

He knows how hard you work, sees you slump down on the sofa every evening, too tired to say much, to eat much, to make love. It can’t be legal, he says, below minimum wage, but you know you could earn more, higher commission, so you work harder, show houses that have been on the market for weeks, or in this case months.

You think it’s charming but the look on the faces of the viewers says it all; too dusty, too ruined, too expensive to do up.

They’re late today so you reckon they’re not coming and you’re probably right. But you like to think the best of people, give them ten more minutes, twenty at least.

You wander round the house, figuring the doorbell is loud enough to be heard from anywhere.

You wish you could buy this place, just sell a few more ‘normal’ ones, enough for a deposit. You know Fred would love it – all the space for his collection, he’d have the study he always wanted.

A chime goes and you head downstairs and open the door but the entrance is empty, then you realise the chime is still going. Not a chime, a tune, a ballet. So you slam the door and rush back to the little bedroom, the one with the faded pink wallpaper, for the child you and Fred could never have.

Opening the door slowly you see why it’s playing, who turned the key just that extra notch, and you smile.

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